Opinions, ideas, suggestions?

[plural]

so I have to create an advertisement for my digital class
here is what I am think for a rough draft
lemme know what you think

would love some ideas relating to improving the text especially
just doesnt flow like I would like

I am not however looking to turn this into a pro-war/anti-war commentary
This peice is commenting on a specific slogan not my particular position on the war
(which regardless of whether you are pro or anti you probably wouldnt like much)





oh if ya wanna steal it or something, lemme know and I can give you a high rez version